First week’s topic is
‘Hero’ . In this essay I will try to mention my hero.
At the outset, of course , I love my hero
so much. Well, but why is he my hero ? Because he is frank and he is with me in all circumstances. He never gives up. At the
same time he does not let me give up. When I have a problem, he immediately
recognizes that. He understands and supports me. He helps me solving the
problems. When I was wrong , sometimes
he flies of handle but never hurts me. If he unintentionally hurts me, he
always makes amends.
I wish he were always with me and my hero.
NOTE: For my previous
essay,
I agree with your ideas about what makes someone a hero.Your essay is okay but there is no topic paragraph or conclusion. I think you can add them.And you did not use the transition words. You should use them in your essay.
Except these ones there is nothing wrong in your essay.